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In many countries, people are working increasingly longer hours. What are reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative effect?

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Overwork can make an individual stressed and
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. meanwhile, In numerous countries employees are overworking and I think it is a negative impact. I will be discussing
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 for long
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 is due to the financial problems in some people's life having a lot of responsibilities for the family and some
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 overtime time and hard to get promotions and reach a certain position to achieve their life goals.
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, one of my colleagues who was appointed with me as a teacher always wanted to achieve a higher position and for ,that he was always working hard and one day he became a director of education.
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 can affect employees' health. meantime overtime
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 can give a short-term benefit to an individual but they can not
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 for a longer period of time .
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, if a
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 is always working and not doing anything else it will increase his stress level and
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 it will gradually affect in
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's health.
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, if the
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 is always working and spending less time with his family eventually his bond with his family decreases and the money he is making will be of no use if your family is not around you. In conclusion, in various ,countries people
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 for longer
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 for numerous reasons.
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 has negative impacts like health problems, can't
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 and lowering level of the family bonds.
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 ,in my opinion, it is a negative effect.
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