You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Eva and I am a pianist from a musical band. I am writing to express disappointment with regard to the possibility of having concerts at the community
hall
anymore. Our group used to rehearse there to hold rock concerts at charity festivals.
Besides
, we enjoyed practising there a lot due to the high quality of the sound and facilities the
hall
offered. Our rock band is a charity project and the main aim of
that is
collecting money for homeless children. Most part of the group consists of high school volunteers and our work is unpaid by the government.
That is
why we really need to continue our meetings and we would like to ask you about considering the other days we could have a practice at the
hall
.
For example
, we might start on Saturday and Sunday mornings if it is suitable for the
hall
administration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Eva Tritenko
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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