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Some people believe that school children should not be given home work by their teachers whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #school #children #home #work #teachers #homework #role #education
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The chart illustrates the cost of consumer products in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010. Overall, both countries spend the most on cars, in
France
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, they spend 400,000 and the
UK
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 spend above 450,000(
pounds
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 sterling).
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, we can notice that there is a large difference in camera spending between
France
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 and the
UK
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, in
France
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 people don’t spend too much money on cameras(150,000
pounds
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),
however
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, in the
UK
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, people spent over 350,000(
pounds
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 sterling), which is more than double the amount in
France
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. Both countries spend a similar amount on computers, in
France
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 they spend 380,000(
pounds
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 sterling), and
the
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UK
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,350,000(
pounds
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 sterling), only a 30,000(
pounds
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 sterling) difference.
On the other hand
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, we can see
France
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 spends 50,000 more
on
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than the
UK
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 on perfume, with the
UK
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 spending less than 150,000. As you can see, the largest disparities in spending are books and cameras.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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