Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

At present, famous

people

are renowned for their stylish look and cash

instead

of their achievements, and

this

has a wrong impression on youth

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. I agree with

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and my essay will elaborate on

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in the following paragraphs. In the

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place, young

people

are not mature enough to understand that

people

who are at the top become famous because they had overcome many obstacles before. Actually, money comes when

people

achieve their purposes and

this

also

makes them stylish.

Therefore

, it is necessary to guide youth that it is more crucial to focus on their skills and sharpen them in order to succeed in life. To illustrate, most

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the researches

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found that youngsters are 30% more likely to be influenced by

celebrities

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wealth and fame, and

this

has a negative impression on youth’s understanding of achieving success. What is more, it is undeniable that

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young

people

usually want to be like

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idol

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. For

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reason, celebrities

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some responsibility for their actions, because

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young guys

to

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emulate famous

people

.

For instance

, we can easily notice that when

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a young

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person like some famous idol, he or she usually starts repeating everything that

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celebrity does,

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can change own style or personality.

Thus

, celebrity has more effect on

young

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the young

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generation and it should not be only about glamour and wealth. To conclude, famous

people

are known for their glamour

instead

of their achievements and

this

sets a negative example for

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youngsters.

However

, there are celebrities who are popular due to their performances and achievements. In my opinion, when it comes to idealizing a role model

people

should be more selective and see these personalities from their personal life as well.