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You have bought furniture from a store. When you received, there were some damages. Write a letter to the concerned store manager. In your letter, you should: Give information about the furniture. Explain the damage Ask the manager to solve your issue.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction over the damaged furniture which I noticed after it was delivered by your team. It was on 24 January, I ordered a sofa, a dining table and a wardrobe from your furniture shop: ‘The Wood World’. As I purchased three items, you offered me chairs for the dining table as a complement, and I got impressed with the purchase and your service. You
also
 offered
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free home delivery, which made me even more comfortable. The delivery was made the
next
 day itself,
however
, when I tried to set the furniture, I found some serious
damages
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 the sofa and the wardrobe. Two legs on the left side of the sofa are broken and the doors of the wardrobe are not closing properly. I think the issue might have happened at the time of delivery. As you have a replacement offer valid for 6 months, I am not seriously concerned
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 the damage.
However
, I would like you to make it faster as I have a function at home. The purchase details and other documents are attached for reference. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Michael
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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