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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
There is an argumentative notion heating up a debate
whether
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 the optimal tactic to solve the global environmental matter is to hike the cost of fuel. I would not regard myself as an advocate of
this
 notion. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the cost of petroleum is not the ideal approach to
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 with the worldwide environment.
Furthermore
, because of the inelastic demand for oil, all
vehicles
 run on gasoline,
even
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and even
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 though the
price
 of supply is ever-increasing, people still have an insatiable thirst for
the
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petrol.
For instance
, in Viet Nam,
although
 the government has just raised the
price
 of gasoline, citizens are in an unmoving rush to purchase gas because the great demand
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 going to work and school is
daily
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 essence. Climbing the
price
 of fuel makes no difference in minimizing the utilization of
vehicles
.
Hence
, hiking the cost of gasoline is not an equivalent solution to protect the surrounding. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the increase in
the
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fuel's
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fuel
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price
 is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more far-reaching alternatives to address environmental issues. Most electric
vehicles
 run on renewable energy, it does not emit greenhouse gas and
affect
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 the air quality of the environment.
For example
, Vinfast is a well-known car maker in Viet Nam, it has an eco-friendly electric
automobiles
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automobile
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 system. It meets the needs of people without adversely affecting the air quality.
Therefore
, the use of electric
vehicles
 is one of the most efficient solutions to reduce toxic exhaust fumes, which can save the environment. To conclude, the remedy
of
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 environmental contamination is not to raise the
price
 of petrol because there are a bunch of other choices that can solve the problem of environmental pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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