Virtual reality has beenaajor breakthrough in technology. However like theadvent of smartphones many people have become so engrossed in it that theytend to ignorethe outside world.

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believe that virtual
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has made individuals anti-
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opinion, since there is no face-to-face communication due to virtual
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, and excessive use of the
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can lead to the abandonment of the family. Many
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find it easier to communicate through the
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. They prefer to discuss over WhatsApp, Viber or other apps available on the
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but talking to face-face communication helps build mutual trust when you communicate on the
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trust may not exist. It is the biggest reason why many
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can not talk with another person in real life. When young
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use of
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too much, the abandonment of the family will occur as one of the negative effects of social media.
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who spend most of their time surfing the
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can become insensitive to real life and
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around them, including members of their family. The most appropriate example for
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is the young couple in Korea because they were so busy with their virtual baby and forget about their real baby.
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poor baby died of hunger. In concluding of
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may become so engrossed in virtual
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that they tend to ignore the outside world. Including these main reasons, it can be concluded, that virtual
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has had many impacts on the world and the individuals that live in it.One of those
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,pacs is a social aspect. Virtual
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has made
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addicted to it

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