Tese days, a considerable amount of adversing is directed at children.Sould it be banned because of the adverse effects? to some extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertisement is a key factor in modern business. There are people who believe that significant

ads

focused on the younger generation should be banned as they could have a negative impact. I completely disagree with

this

statement and will discuss

this

in the essay. An advertisement is a form of art. It provides enough information and usefulness of the product. There are several endorsements which are targeted at

children

such

ads

related to education,oral health, energy

drinks

, foods and many more. Each company has a unique product and with the help of ,

ads

they can present it to the targeted audience. When we talk about educational

ads

, Byju- an Indian company, has started a concept of learning online, where students can subscribe to the application and understand subjects around the clock.

Furthermore

, promotions of toothpaste have been teaching for decades the importance of oral health. Advertisements of energy

drinks

like, bournvita

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and

mylo

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are the

drinks

which can be used with milk and these

drinks

provide nutrition. Most of the

ads

are for the betterment of the child only. There are people who claimed that

ads

have a negative impact on the child. They have their own reasons

firstly

, companies have hired successful people to promote their

product

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children

are the most

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vulnerable

valnerable

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valuable

group

hence

, and the attraction ratio is usually higher in the group of age.

Secondly

, promotions of junk,preservative foods and carbonated

drinks

cause detrimental impacts on

children

's health.

For example

, when Salman Khan, the Indian actor, promoted Thumbs Up (a carbonated drink),

children

are attracted towards these products. In conclusion, I believe that Advertisement is a multi-million industry and has a huge contribution to the country's economy. There are several

ads

which are not good for

children

here, the government and parents perform a vital role. Government should ban the ad or ask a respective company to provide a healthy solution. Parents should inform their kids of the cons of consuming unhealthy foods.

This

way we can stop

reprecations

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deprecations

precautions

caused by

ads

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