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The self-driving cars is getting popular in the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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•In our modern life, transportation has been proven to be a
revolution
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a
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 almost
every day
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 type of industry and
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the
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self-driving
cars
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 have
being
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 famous.
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 of all,
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 transports are really comfortable and extremely easy to drive.
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 of all, those
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 never violate traffic rules and avoid accidents •On the one hand, nowadays the majority of inhabitants use the self-driving automobile
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 of
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cars
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this
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 transports are exceedingly
comfort
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 and
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 If
people
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 do not know how to drive
cars
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, these
cars
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 are very convenient for them because these
cars
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 are not driven by humans. 
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, my
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 workplace is far away, so my dad gave my mother a self-driving car for her birthday, and I hope it was not difficult for her to drive
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 car. •
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, The most beneficial part of the fact that self-driving
cars
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 are widely used by
people
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 is that there are
less
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 traffic jams and fewer accidents, and
people
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 are very few
accidentslives
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accidents lives
 are saved because these
cars
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 follow the rules of the road and never violate the rules of the road.
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, in my city, many
people
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 prefer to use self-driving
cars
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, and many
people
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 are using them, and nowadays there are very few accidents on the roads, and I think
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 the best part of these
cars
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. •In conclusion,
people
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 should use a lot of small controlled machines because it is not only useful for
people
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's
life
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 but
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 very useful for the country.
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