Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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their cell phones from 2016 until 2019. The most noticeable feature is the drop in the proportion of the use of phone calls. It is seen that the

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remained stable during 2016 and 2017 having a

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rise in the following years. The projected proportion for Social networks was 50% in 2016, with a slight decline from 50% to 48% in 2017. Perhaps

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in 2018 and 2019 was the biggest of all reasons. All in all, we can see that none of the reasons had a stable

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comparing all of the four years, showing that teenagers are very flexible when we take into consideration their uses for cell

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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