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Today we are living in
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, all world in close relationships with
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websites . I strongly agree with that , the
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world is our true being. in
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I will explain and support my agreement .
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services te like nowadays, the
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lifestyle and new devices had been discovered in that decade .
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, some people were excited to use those new devices and how
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made them connect with each other even from far away countries.
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people could contact each other by chatting , that a big important step toward enhancing more close connections.
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currently
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planet is one global area by simply social media applications.
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individuals are using more than two types of social apps, which has led them to more connection with others for different reasons
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as work , family and study .
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, a telegram application a recent app that has been created to open channels for many purposes like invitations and plans ..etc. Overall , as more internet applications and new smart devices have released as more close connections and relationships from all different world sides would be able to be done easily . In conclusion ,
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lifestyle has been established
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by the time of discovering a network website,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overstated
  • fundamentally altering our experiences
  • significant advancements
  • telemedicine
  • robotic surgeries
  • personalized medicine
  • educational apps
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • criticisms
  • automation
  • digital divide
  • privacy and cybersecurity
  • acknowledging
  • potential drawbacks
  • quality of life
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