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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate
whether
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about whether
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 raising
the
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traditional
energy’s
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 prices can solve the ever-increasing problem of the global
environment
. In my opinion, I would not consider myself an advocate of
this
 notion. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the
price
 of fuel is not the optimal tactic to solve the
environment
. In fact, all vehicles run on gas so the demand for gasoline is ever-increasing. Even if the fuel’s
price
 hiked exponentially, people still have a quest
for
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buy
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 it.
For example
, in Vietnam,
although
 the government has just raised the
price
 of gas, citizens still go to buy it because the need to work and go to school is a daily necessity so increasing the
gasoline’s
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price
 makes no difference in reducing the number of users.
Hence
,
this
 is not
the
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 effective approach to
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 the surrounding. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the increase in
the
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fuel’
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price
 is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more far-reaching alternatives to address environmental issues. In
this
 day and age, electric vehicles run on renewable energy, which is
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widely-used
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,
do
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 not give out greenhouse gases,
therefore
, the air quality of the
environment
 will not be influenced.
For instance
, Vinfast is a car
make
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 which has a great reputation in Vietnam with an eco-friendly electric vehicle system. It not only satisfies the travel demand of residents
,
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 but
also
 does not bring a disadvantageous impact on the air quality of the
environment
.
Thus
, using electric cars is one of the effective solutions to decline CO2 which can tackle the environmental problem. To sum up, I do not have a consensus
with
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 increasing the
fuel’s
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price
 to handle the problem of the world
environment
. From my perspective, an effective way to protect the
environment
 is to utilize more electric vehicles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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