In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

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busy
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lifestyle.
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traditional
festivals
and celebrations have vanished in some parts of the world.
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be taken to
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,
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life schedule might be a reason. Everyone has a busy
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lifestyle
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life style
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, so they don't have
a
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enough time to spend their traditional
festivals
.
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the
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sri
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lanka
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ramazan
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,
depavali
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Deepavali
and easter
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are not commercial holidays. These are only public holidays.So those who
working
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in
private
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sector ,
they
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need to get a holiday or
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half-day
half day
halfday
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half-day
work. Because of
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they don't have
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times to prepare for
festivals
. Another reason, new
generations
are not
interest
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to
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festivals
. They are trying
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ti
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relax or go out with their friends
in
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these
festivals
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holidays. And so we see
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types of possible
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of
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this
situation. There are many solutions that could be taken for
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.
For example
to give the knowledge and experience to current
generations
about our festival celebration.
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generations
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about
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the celebration
then
they will pass to future
generations
.
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, another moving way is that use the media to
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motivate
motivated
motivat
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motivate
individuals
for
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celebration
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.
Then
, they will prepare the festival
before
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a week. we see
also
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be taken to
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situations
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. We saw from the above how the lifestyle has
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. we
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saw
that
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how vanished the festival in some parts of the world. In conclusion, we could say that
,
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the
reasons
and the actions
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be taken is as
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above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traditional festivals
  • heritage
  • cultural identity
  • folklore
  • cultural tourism
  • intergenerational
  • homogenization
  • commercialization
  • intangible cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • awareness
  • revitalize
  • cultural diversity
  • educational programs
  • governmental support
  • logistical support
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