In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with otherold people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the famiy?
Nowadays,
government
of Add an article
the government
britain
is taking so much tax in Change the capitalization
Britain
compare
to other countries. But it Replace the word
comparison
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does not
doesn't
doesnot
mean Correct your spelling
does not
to
they should borrow Change preposition
apply
such
type of expense. As today's
generation have to take attention Change preposition
Today's
toward
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to
this
kind of situation. Because if Correct your spelling
government
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the goverment
goverment
will take any kind of Correct your spelling
government
responsibilities
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responsibility
then
they cannot focus on other development.
As per
my opinion, Change preposition
In
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children
children's
childrens
are Correct your spelling
children
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responsible
resposibile
for paying Correct your spelling
responsible
charges
for Correct article usage
the charges
this
and I want to Correct your spelling
recommend
recommended
recommanded
that caring Correct your spelling
recommend
of
parents is Change preposition
for
duty
of children because their parents are not to take Add an article
the duty
oldiage
home in Correct your spelling
old-age
old age
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presence
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the presense
presense
of their children. Correct your spelling
presence
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is Correct your spelling
their
the
thier
duty that they have to Correct your spelling
their
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
form
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from
them
own pocket.
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their
On the other hand
, in oldage
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old age
home
there are Add a comma
,home
nueses
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nurses
nuances
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available
avilable
on free of charge as Correct your spelling
available
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government
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the goverment
goverment
must pay Correct your spelling
government
them
, but they may not complete our Change preposition
for them
parents
need as they wish. Change noun form
parent's
parents'
Moreover
, Correct your spelling
government
governments
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the goverment
goverment
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government
have
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has
also
so many
other development Correct quantifier usage
much
work
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works
for
so Change preposition
apply
government
should not take their complain
seriously.
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complaint
Secondly
, government
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the government
have
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tohave
take
Wrong verb form
taken
burden
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the burden
of
people who Change preposition
on
real
need Replace the word
really
such
kind of help. For example
, If someone loss
their children or life partner so they need help who can take care of them. As their age may be more Replace the word
loses
then
60 years above Replace the word
than
in
a result they cannot do personal work.
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as
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Finally
Final
Finaly
, Correct your spelling
Finally
in
a result, Change preposition
as
government
is not Add an article
the government
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responsible
resposible
for all Correct your spelling
responsible
citizen
. If any needy people want help Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
then
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