Some people believe citizens should be allowed to carry handguns in order to protect themthelves, while others think this can lead to many social security problems in the society. What is your opinion? Use specific rsasons to support your answer.

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society. In my
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shoot it. While you are about it, they could keep themselves. I think that these are the advantages.
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peace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Second Amendment
  • right to bear arms
  • self-protection
  • concealed carry
  • civil rights
  • gun control legislation
  • public safety
  • firearm regulations
  • background checks
  • concealed handgun permits
  • stand-your-ground laws
  • accidental discharge
  • gun violence
  • crime deterrence
  • escalation of conflict
  • law enforcement challenges
  • responsible ownership
  • community safety initiatives
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