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Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attent school at the age of 7. In your opinion, what are the advantages of attending school before the age of 7.

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that starting
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 at an earlier
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 is very
favorable
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 for
children
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, while others
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 convinced
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that
children
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 must remain and attend
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 at
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 of 7. In my opinion, I think it is good for young
children
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 to go to
school
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 on
time
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. Because it is easy for him to learn all the
lessons
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 if he attends on
time
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. In the forthcoming sentences, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the issue and explain why. I believe in the latter. I believe in the previous
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. On the one hand, it is very good for
children
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 to go on
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.,
that is
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, at the
age
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 of 7. To master the
lessons
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, they will not get tired
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 many
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everything
everyting
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. Because they go to preschool until they are 7 years old. He teaches many
things
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 there.
Fo
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 example they learn to write, read, draw various pictures and other
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. The
children
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 are very well equipped with these
things
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 before they go to
school
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.
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 it will be easy to learn in
school
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. They do not even listen to their teachers. So there are many advantages of going to
school
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 on
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. There are several disadvantages to starting
school
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 before the
age
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 of 7.
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, they can be very tired if they go
first
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. Because they are very small.
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, it is difficult for him to learn the
lessons
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 . Because they have not learned many
things
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.
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 they find it difficult to master these
things
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 and do not understand well. They learn but it is very difficult to learn.
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, all
children
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 must go to
school
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 on
time
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. In conclusion,
children
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 should leave on
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, and they should
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 study in kindergarten before going to
school
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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