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Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attent school at the age of 7. In your opinion, what are the advantages of attending school before the age of 7.

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that starting
school
 at an earlier
age
 is very
favorable
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 for
children
, while others
be
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 convinced
by
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that
children
 must remain and attend
school
 at
age
 of 7. In my opinion, I think it is good for young
children
 to go to
school
 on
time
. Because it is easy for him to learn all the
lessons
 if he attends on
time
. In the forthcoming sentences, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the issue and explain why. I believe in the latter. I believe in the previous
latter
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. On the one hand, it is very good for
children
 to go on
time
.,
that is
, at the
age
 of 7. To master the
lessons
, they will not get tired
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 many
lessons
 . Can do
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everything
everyting
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everything
. Because they go to preschool until they are 7 years old. He teaches many
things
 there.
Fo
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 example they learn to write, read, draw various pictures and other
things
. The
children
 are very well equipped with these
things
 before they go to
school
.
Then
 it will be easy to learn in
school
. They do not even listen to their teachers. So there are many advantages of going to
school
 on
time
. There are several disadvantages to starting
school
 before the
age
 of 7.
First
, they can be very tired if they go
first
. Because they are very small.
Secondly
, it is difficult for him to learn the
lessons
 . Because they have not learned many
things
.
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 writing fluency.
Then
 they find it difficult to master these
things
 and do not understand well. They learn but it is very difficult to learn.
Therefore
, all
children
 must go to
school
 on
time
. In conclusion,
children
 should leave on
time
, and they should
also
 study in kindergarten before going to
school
.
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