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The primary purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computers, software, videos, and DVDs. To what extent you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
It is
true
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mean
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 task of that libraries is to contribute
books
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 and they do not have so much
money
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 to spend because they
mostly
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 founded by the government. Some people disagree with the
choices
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 to spend the
money
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the
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modern
technology
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In my opinion, the
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library
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 most important function
that
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 they have
books
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 that accessible
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for
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 everyone. I
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 believe they can use their fundy for
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modern
technology
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On the one hand,
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books
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 are the mean business for the
library
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. By visiting the
library
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 you expect
books
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 on the shelves. The
books
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 needed to
be
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be updated
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update
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updated
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 with the newest editions and examples.
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, the latest edition of Harry Potter. The readers expect the newest version and not that they spend the
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instead
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 on
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DVD's
DVDs
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. Most important is the
books
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 and the rest is side issues.
Body paragraph 2
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, the
library
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 can use
their
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 funding for
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modern
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. By using
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modern
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 they attract
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 the younger generation. People
having
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 phones and
computer
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computers
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 and by providing e-
books
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 or
audio
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audiobooks
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books
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 they can
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 listen
or
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reading
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read
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 a book. To make that possible,
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libraries
needs
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 to invest in computers and operations systems.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the mean core for libraries is to
provided
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books
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 but they can
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for
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the
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modern
technology
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary purpose
  • public libraries
  • limited resources
  • hi-tech media
  • traditional spaces
  • knowledge
  • literacy
  • education
  • community
  • collection of books
  • maintenance and updates
  • strain budgets
  • acquiring new titles
  • community hubs
  • technological advancements
  • digital divide
  • access to information
  • learning modes
  • e-books
  • community engagement
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