Some People believe that the best way to reduce commuting time is to replace parks and gardens near the city center with commuter apartment building, but other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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think that
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of
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near the
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convent to the
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area. While other
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are against
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matter. There are several advantages of convent
Parks
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and
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to the
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and foremost, the traffic
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been declined to construct building or apartment near
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city
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main
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advantages
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consumption might be less
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because
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have less commuting so, carbon dioxide emission has been reduced.
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results
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air pollution
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might be declined.
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,they saved money.
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government spend around 20 per cent of total expenditures. So, replace to
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specific needs of
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who suffered in other serious situations.
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they absorb Carbon dioxide and give fresh oxygen.
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like exercise, yoga and quality time of their own. In conclusion, the benefits of
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that pollution has been rose.
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