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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone.

#group #team #activities #skills #life
It has been said that group or
team
activities
 are better than those make alone when it comes to developing
skills
. As far as I am concerned, I totally disagree with
this
. I
am deeply convinced
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 both offer competencies. In
this
 essay, I will
first
, discuss the
skills
 you may gain in practising a sports
team
 and
secondly
, I will discuss the competencies that you can get by doing a one-man activity. To start with, participating
to
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 a sport which gathers people is tremendously beneficial for different reasons.
First
 of all, being a member of
sports
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team
 is one of the best ways to develop some human qualities. For ,example when I played football at a young age, I had to help my mates who were struggling due to the intensity of the game.
This
 situation helped me to develop a sense of empathy and solidarity. Continuing with my own experience,
a
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couple
ofcouple
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couple
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years
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 ago, when I was practising Crossfit and I was a member of a
team
, on some occasions, I had to take
the
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leadership in order to win competitions. In
this
 context, I gain leadership
skills
. Concerning
activities
 that are realised alone, people can
also
 extract the positive in them. There are many sports in which players have to face adversity alone, which leads to reinforcing their personalities. Taking the example of tennis, I am always amazed by the capacity of players to cope with issues that they face when playing. According to Raphael Nadal, he said tennis was one of the reasons that helps him to be resilient and competitive. To sum up, both kinds of
activities
 offer
skills
 essential in our life. Thanks to my experience I can tell that
team
 or group
activities
 do not give more competences than the other.
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