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Write an essay about online couses and classroom education

Nowadays,
education
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 is considered to be a crucial aspect
in
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 everyone’s
life
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. It is the path that could lead us to achieve our dreams and aspire to obtain goals in
life
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.
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, it is seemingly that several
number of
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people
favor
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 the notion of online
education
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 while the other group would rather have
a
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 desire to get educated by
face to face
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 learning process.
However
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, both of these two kinds of
education
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 have been used among a wide range of people and the reasons that lie behind certain
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 are discussed in
this
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 essay. It is extremely obvious that
internet
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the internet
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 has
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change
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changed
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 many aspects
in
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 our lives and
education
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 is included in
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such
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 change.
Moreover
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, it is completely stated that getting educated through online lessons is considered to be a paradigm shift that has reshaped the notion of “
education
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 is only approachable through face-to-face learning.”
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,
those
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 people who have a busy
life
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 and full schedule, a web-based
education
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 is completely a perfect way to get
taught
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caught
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.
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, we can not deny that it has offered the opportunity to many individuals who do not have schools or universities in their place to complete their
education
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 much easier.
On the other hand
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, another idea has been argued that obtaining the perfect
education
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 is achievable only through
real
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classroom
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classrooms
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 where you can get communicate with your peers and genuinely feel the vibes of learning. There is no doubt that
this
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education
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 would help the students socialize with
community
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, feel more confident and level up their
self efficacy
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 rather than just immersing themselves in
a
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virtual
life
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. Taking everything into account , I feel that both online and classroom
education
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 is highly
depending
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 on
a
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personal preferences. You can choose any medium that you feel
it
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is appropriate and suitable for your needs.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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