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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industries and fueling transpotation. However, one day we will reach point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleated. How can we conserve these resources? What are some of the alternatives for fossil fuels?

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Even in
this
 21st century, fossil fuels are the main source of
energy
 generators. If
this
 trend continues, the existence of fossil fuels will cease in near future.
Therefore
, it is important to protect these resources by shifting to
energy
 recycling and using alternatives
such
 as
wind
 and solar
power
 as much as possible. Principle manufacturers of
energy
-consuming equipment should make aware of how to recycle
energy
. Here, it is important to understand how
energy
 is getting wasted and how
this
 waste
energy
 can be converted to useful
energy
 again.
For example
, when an air-conditioner is used, lots of
energy
 is released into the outside environment as waste heat.
This
 heat can be collected; and, it can be used to boil water. Rather than depending heavily on combustibles derived from fossils, it is important to move on to alternative
energy
 sources which do not get depleted with the use. These are
also
 called renewable
energy
 sources and the most popular ones are solar and
wind
power
. Countries near the equator get
a high amounts
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 of sunlight throughout the year;
hence
, they have the highest potential to rely on solar
power
. In line with
this
 thinking, places which have high gales can install
wind
 turbines to generate
power
.
For example
, as all the new houses in Australia are built with solar panel and
wind
 turbine, these households
consumes
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 little or no electricity from the main grid. In conclusion, it is unavoidable that our future generations will be deprived of fossil fuels.
Thus
, as a means of conservation, it is critical to
convert
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 waste
energy
 to a useful form as much as possible while moving on to renewable
energy
 options.
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