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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #population #mixture #nationalities
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am agree
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 with a
mixture
 of nationalities
bring
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brings
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more
mor
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more
 development and becomes
more
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a more
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 interesting country.
People
 from different nationalities
brings
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bring
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wideariet
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wearied
 of
workforce
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the workforce
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 and
teaches
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teach
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 about other
cultures
. There are many talented
people
 in
this
 world. they have
specific
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the specific
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skill
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skills
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of
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 their
culture
 which is connected with their territory. When
people
are migrate
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 they
also
 take
skills
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of
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from
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 that place and
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forward
forword
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forward
 to
new
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a new
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 territory and teach new
people
 about that skills. In
india
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India
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 we have
largest
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the largest
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numbers
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number
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 of
cultures
 established in our country. so that
people
 can mix
each
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 other and spread their skills to
new
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a new
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 one that
make
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 other
culture
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cultures
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helpful
helpfull
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helpful
 to
develope
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develop
. like in
mumbai
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Mumbai
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 where all major community is resides there.
gujarati
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Gujarati
Gujarat
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, marwadi,
sindhi
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Sindhi
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,
punjabi
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Punjabi
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 and
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Christian
chritian
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Christian
 etc.
they
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apply
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bring more contributionscontributin to
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develop
develope
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develop
 that area and it can force
to
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it to
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 grow faster than
single
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a single
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culture
 society. we can show
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of
architarures
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architectures
 different types of food and festivals. it becomes more interesting with
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differences
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the defferences
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defferences
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differences
of
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between
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people
. they develop faster with
mixture
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a mixture
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 of business ideas and different
business
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businesses
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 help each other to grow
that
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in that
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 area. It has minor
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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also
. with
mixture
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a mixture
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 of
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nationality
nationalities
nationalitiy
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nationalities
 that
perticuler
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particular
 region can be affected by their heritage. or it may
also
 happen that after a several
period
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 of time that a several
period
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 of time that regional
culture
 and heritage can be losing power
by
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 time. In conclusion, having a
mixture
 of
cultures
help
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helps
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 to grow fast and develop. it makes a country more interesting which
help
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helps
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 locals and others learn about different
cultures
 and traditions.
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