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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir\Madam Applying for voluntary work. In response
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 your advert which was in the Daily newspaper on Sunday,I would like to inform you that am interested to work as a volunteer at your hospital. Well ,am a qualified nurse.I graduated in my early 20's in the year
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2007.I have worked at Willovale Medical Center for 6years.In the same
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 I did 4years at Arundel hospital
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 the pediatric section.
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 went on and opened a Day Care Centre,
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 when I retired so I could give my all to the project.
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 I would like to volunteer as a nurse in
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 section.
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 tell you why I would love to do unpaid work.Sadly I have recently lost my husband due to negligence.The nurse was overwhelmed with patients as result she forgot to give my husband his diabetes medication.As an
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 I have been depressed so I figured that I can you
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 opportunity to help myself and the community as well. To be precise I would be grateful if you put me on an 8hours shift on weekdays only . Yours Faithfully Chipi Sami
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