Urbanisation has meant that more and more families are raising their children in the city; however, the countryside is a far better environment tbring up children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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cities

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areas which are filled with a lot of facilities and it suits to raise kids. While

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the advantage of the

environment

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aspect

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rural areas

are

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better to nurture juveniles than the

cities

.

This

essay will examine both sides of the opinion and

then

give a supporting idea to the latter opinion.

First

of all, A lot of amenities in the

cities

,

such

as many schools and hospitals, are effective factors for children. Due to a process of land developments in the

cities

which are focused on the economic aspect,

this

can lead to a better quality infrastructure than the countryside. For

this

reason, it indicates that a child who was born in

this

place may have a lot of chances to grow and learn.

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, a high standard of

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education system in the centre city might produce an intense course for their teenagers, so these students can

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more opportunities for their success.

Conversely

, Growing in a country town can cause physical strength for long-term benefit.

Although

, they lack some amenities; fewer schools or fewer infirmaries,

this

place has more natural resources than the towns. Improving children's knowledge and skills is an important thing for parents, but

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development of

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body is

also

important too. Admittedly, teenagers need space to explore and

then

develop themselves, the rural areas encourage them to do that.

For instance

,fresh air and clean water are some of the resources which are vital factors to prevent juveniles from disease,

thus

, they may have quality growth. To conclude,

however

, urbanisation might be more convenient, but I tend to agree with the latter opinion. Because a healthy body is the most necessary reason, they would lack an essence fundamental if they had not had a physical factor.

Thus

, the ecosystem of the countryside is better to bring up juveniles.