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First
, before the day of getting appropriate wood, it is necessary to plant seedlings, wait four months and
then
 replant them
to
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 the site.
Further
, after three years, it is necessary to thin out the forest and let the trees grow for another thirteen
year
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.
Secondly
, thin "slats"are prepared and treated for sixty days.
Then
that
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 recesses are cut
in
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into
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the
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thin slats. After that in the got
grooves
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 black lead rods are placed and covered with a
second
 thin board (new slat) according to the sandwich principle.
Third
, the resulting structure is placed under a press and subjected to heat treatment for connection. The fourth stage includes cutting blanks for future pencils.
Then
 the blanks are painted, sharpened and packed in boxes as a finished product.
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