Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

In modern times many individuals are comfortable with online
instead
of physically
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. Both of them have some advantages and disadvantages but in my perspective communicating online has
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benefit
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because of its comfortableness as well as
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saves
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time
.
First
of all, peoples
are
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nowadays gives much
priority
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to their comfort zone rather than
the
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old
time
. They can do a lot of things easily by sitting at home.
For example
, before
this
online decade
people
have to go to
the
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restaurant to buy food,
on the contrary
, now they can have food at home just by
click
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of a button
in
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their smartphones. These extreme facilities are now
peoples
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comfort zone and
personally
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I prefer to stay home rather than
going
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out. So now for that
people
can spend more
time
with their family.
Secondly
, there is a great way of
communication
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over
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online, so for
that
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people
can get connected with whomever they want
that is
an incredible development of communication it helps to save
time
.
People
now can do everything over
phone
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instead
of going there physically.
For example
, one should have to attend a social meeting, by using
online
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different app they can directly attend that meeting rather than attending own self. They save the
time
of going there as traffic increased a lot. By using technological things
everything’s gets
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easier and
people
save
their
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valuable
time
. To conclude, I prefer communicating with
people
over
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online is much easier than
physical
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meeting
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as it saves a lot of
time
and
people
also
do many things by staying in their comfort zone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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