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For many people, profession is the lifelong commitment. They start their carrier in one profession and stick to it through their life. For some others, there is no need to stick to one carrier or one profession. They even pursue multiple carriers at once. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a number of
employees
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 who
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 in the same
industry
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 for their entire life
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, few
people
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 believe that they could
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 the
industry
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 and
work
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 on various profiles. I will discuss both opinions in an essay.
Employees
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 remain to
work
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 with the same segment have several reasons.
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, the fundamental reason is the satisfaction of
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. Their jobs motivate them to give their best on daily basis, leading to higher productivity and better incentives. These
employees
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 tend to get promotions more than others. Here, I want to talk about my father his name is Mr Jayesh Bhavsar,
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 started his career as a marketing representative in a pharma company. From the beginning to till date he is not only associated with the same
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 but
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 with the same company and the reason for
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 the
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 environment. Part of the progressive firms creates good leaders. The company understands the issue of an employee and gives suggestions for betterment that can sustain for a longer time.
People
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 who have good support and a deep understanding of
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 do not
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 their
industry
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.
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, the scenario has changed over a decade. There are
people
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 who believe that they can
change
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 their
industry
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 and carrier as well.
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 with, technology and digitalisation perform an important role. As the latest technologies are invented, the importance of human
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 has deteriorated, and
people
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 need to
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 their job.
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, the pandemic of covid-19 taught us the concept of working from home. The industries like Information technology have shifted the
work
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 style and after 2 years of the pandemic,
people
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 are still working from home.
Employees
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 from different industries are attracted and move to
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 segment. In conclusion, I believe that dissatisfaction with jobs has increased over the years leading to
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job
change
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 and sometimes
industry
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 changes. With a proper understanding of
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employees
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 need
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 phenomenon can be reduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong commitment
  • Start their career
  • Stick to
  • Multiple careers
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Specialization
  • Career progression
  • Exploration
  • Variety
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptability
  • Enhanced skills and knowledge
  • Balanced approach
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