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Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while other believe that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #radio #news #television #purpose
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A few individuals believe that one of the greatest
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way
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 to know about
the
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information is by
radio
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,
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however
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 others feel that
people
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 might
to
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get
a more bulletins
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a more bulletin
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 by watching
television
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. I believe that
television
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 is
much
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a much
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 better
approach
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 to
learn
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learning
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 the
news
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. On the one hand,
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radio
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the radio
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 can be
great
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a great
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 source of
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informations
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information
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 for some
people
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. When they
listen
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 some  
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informations
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information
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 about the something like world’s
news
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by
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on
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radio
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the radio
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devise
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, it might be
good
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a good
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way
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 of
memorize
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memorising
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 or
know
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knowing
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 the bulletins for them.
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This kind
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 of technical
devises
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devices
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 can help to get
news
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 more and
more
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apply
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even with
the
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way
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 more accurate memory.
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,
in
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apply
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Japanese researcher
had
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observed
humans
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humans'
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 action and they certainly knew that
people
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was
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were
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 taking their
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informations
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information
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 about 75-80 % through
radio
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. It can
therefore
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 be argued that
radio
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 may be
on
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one
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 of the source of
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informations
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information
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 which
people
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 are getting.
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,
television
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 perhaps even may be
better
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a better
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way
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 of knowing bulletins for some reason. In a lot of
country
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countries
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,
people
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 are watching
television
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 about some kind of
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informations
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information
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instead
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 of listening
news
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by
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on
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radio
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the radio
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. Because of
this
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way
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 of gaining
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informations
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information
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 is possibly good to know
the
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these things much better.
For instance
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, in
the
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every
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very
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 public
places
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place
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such
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 as restaurants, cafes and canteens,
people
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 are able to watch
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news
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the news
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 by observing
televisions
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television
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,
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apply
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 because
this
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 is a great
way
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 of getting information rather than
radio
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.
Thus
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,
people
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 can say that
television
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 can be
best
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the best
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 approach to
learn
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learning
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news
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the news
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. To conclude, for some
people
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 to
listening
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tolistening
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 the
radio
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 is much preferable, but I feel that watching these things
through
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on
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television
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 channels is
far
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a far
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 better
approach
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to approach
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.
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