Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while other believe that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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to know about
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information is by
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however
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others feel that
people
might
to
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get
a more bulletins
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by watching
television
. I believe that
television
is
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to
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the
news
. On the one hand,
radio
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can be
great
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source of
informations
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for some
people
. When they
listen
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some  
informations
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about the something like world’s
news
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radio
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devise
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, it might be
good
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way
of
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or
know
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the bulletins for them.
This kind
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of technical
devises
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can help to get
news
more and
more
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even with
the
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way
more accurate memory.
For example
,
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Japanese researcher
had
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observed
humans
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action and they certainly knew that
people
was
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taking their
informations
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about 75-80 % through
radio
. It can
therefore
be argued that
radio
may be
on
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of the source of
informations
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which
people
are getting.
On the other hand
,
television
perhaps even may be
better
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way
of knowing bulletins for some reason. In a lot of
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,
people
are watching
television
about some kind of
informations
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instead
of listening
news
by
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radio
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the radio
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. Because of
this
way
of gaining
informations
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is possibly good to know
the
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these things much better.
For instance
, in
the
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every
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public
places
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such
as restaurants, cafes and canteens,
people
are able to watch
news
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the news
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by observing
televisions
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television
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,
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because
this
is a great
way
of getting information rather than
radio
.
Thus
,
people
can say that
television
can be
best
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approach to
learn
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news
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the news
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. To conclude, for some
people
to
listening
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the
radio
is much preferable, but I feel that watching these things
through
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television
channels is
far
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a far
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better
approach
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.
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