The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.

The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in

 the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.
These two graphs show the
number
of
visitors
and prices for visiting the national
park
. From 2011 to 2018 there were variations and changes in the prices for entering the
park
,
as well as
changes in the cost of entering the
park
per person. In 2011 approximately the price of admission to the
park
per person was $7,
this
was changing in 2013 with an increase in the cost of admission per person to $8.
On the other hand
, the price in 2015 and 2018 was similar, costing approximately $15. 2017 saw the highest
number
of
visitors
to the
park
reaching approximately 0.53
million
.
On the other hand
, in 2011 there was the least
number
of
visitors
to the
park
with an approximate sum of 0.28
million
. The trend of
visitors
to the
park
in the years 2013, 2014, and 2015 were almost similar, obtaining the
park
Change noun form
park's
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approximately visit of 0.40
million
.
Finally
, the national
park
had a drop in the
number
of
visitors
in 2018 to 0.45
million
compared to 2017.
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