The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.

The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in

 the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.
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These two graphs show the
number
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of
visitors
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and prices for visiting the national
park
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. From 2011 to 2018 there were variations and changes in the prices for entering the
park
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,
as well as
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changes in the cost of entering the
park
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per person. In 2011 approximately the price of admission to the
park
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per person was $7,
this
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was changing in 2013 with an increase in the cost of admission per person to $8.
On the other hand
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, the price in 2015 and 2018 was similar, costing approximately $15. 2017 saw the highest
number
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of
visitors
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to the
park
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reaching approximately 0.53
million
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2011 there was the least
number
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of
visitors
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to the
park
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with an approximate sum of 0.28
million
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. The trend of
visitors
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to the
park
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in the years 2013, 2014, and 2015 were almost similar, obtaining the
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park
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park's
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approximately visit of 0.40
million
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.
Finally
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, the national
park
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had a drop in the
number
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of
visitors
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in 2018 to 0.45
million
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compared to 2017.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, park, million with synonyms.
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