Many believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment. Only governments and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As human beings have kept
exhausitng
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exhausting
the resources from nature, serious environmental problems have been
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occurring
occuring
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occurring
like climate change and species
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extinction
extinctions
extionction
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extinction
. Along these, the importance of improving
environment
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the environment
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had been increased
accordingly
. Some people insist that individuals are able to help
environment
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the environment
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, but others argue that only huge organizations like governments or companies can offer meaningful
aids
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.
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Admittedly
Admitedly
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Admittedly
, people can make
superfical
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superficial
differences for the
environment
around them.
For example
, the number of trees on
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the Korean
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peninsula
Penninsula
penninsula
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Peninsula
and
proportion
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the proportion
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of trees in
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a forest
the forest
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forest
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forests
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in Korea had
been
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dramatically grown after
declare
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of the national holiday called '
the
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Tree Day'. Every citizen
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a tree in
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a neighborhood
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neighborhood
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or mountain every Tree Day, and it makes Korea
more
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greener than before. Even though it is the government who designed
this
movement, it shows that individuals have
ability
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the ability
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to improve
environment
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the environment
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.
However
, I agree with
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arguing it is the large companies who can create effective changes for
environment
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the environment
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. According to the study, about 80
percent
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per cent
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of
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garbage
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that
cause
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causes
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devilous
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devious
pollution is from
corporation's
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corporations'
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manufacturing activities.
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of the harmful compounds from these commercial conductions is too tremendous to be appeased by other little efforts for
environment
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the environment
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. Considering the magnitude of
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impact from
enterpreneurs
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entrepreneurs
,
company
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the company
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is the only one who can make a stark difference. In conclusion,
although
there are some environmental improvements from individuals, it is negligible compared to how wide and
strong
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large companies give
impacts
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impact
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to
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apply
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the
environment
.
Therefore
it is better to invest in
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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activities in
the
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large organizations
are
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that are
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more helpful for our sustainability.
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  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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