2. Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask some more questions about the trip

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letter to express my interest

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joining the

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with my child. I would like to join

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because my child suffers from asthma. As you are travelling to Australia, I believe during

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season temperature would be in minus degrees. Even though we tried to

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my son, He is strongly willing to go. So we had no choice except to agree with him. I can help

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relaxing for you to enjoy the

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things regarding

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is about the cost of the tickets for each person and

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accommodation

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the tourist visa process and what are the mandatory documents that we need to submit

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I hope you would allow me to join

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with my child. I am looking forward

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faithfully, Rachel Green.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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