2. Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask some more questions about the trip

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Dear

Mr.

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John, I am writing

this

letter to express my interest

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joining the

trip

with my child. I would like to join

this

trip

because my child suffers from asthma. As you are travelling to Australia, I believe during

this

season temperature would be in minus degrees. Even though we tried to

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convince

convence

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my son, He is strongly willing to go. So we had no choice except to agree with him. I can help

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care of

children

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and

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them during

this

trip

so that it would be

little

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relaxing for you to enjoy the

trip

and not

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worry much.

In addition

this

, I will bring some instant food and snacks so that no one will be hungry. I would like to know

few

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things regarding

this

trip

is about the cost of the tickets for each person and

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accommodation

accomodation

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accommodation

? Can you

also

explain

about

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the tourist visa process and what are the mandatory documents that we need to submit

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I hope you would allow me to join

this

trip

with my child. I am looking forward

for

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your reply.

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Your

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faithfully, Rachel Green.

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1Word repetition
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8 paragraphs

188 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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