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Some people believe that all children should learn second language from the time they start school, while others believe that it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. Discuss both views and give Your opinion.

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 some people think that
children
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 should learn a
second
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 accent early in the primary academy, others disagree with
this
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 idea and think that it is appropriate to teach another except their mother tongue voice when they study in secondary
school
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. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, each natural studying
language
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 has to practise and spend a lot of time accumulating skills. If pupils want to use a
second
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language
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 fluently, they should start as fast as they can when the first academy starts.
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, 4 years old
children
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 in Thailand start their first English
language
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 education in a primary
school
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 to lead them accustomed like natives, so they can choose
English
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 Program when they are in secondary
school
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 and over.
Therefore
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,
Children
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 should be taught a
second
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language
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early
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as early
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 as primary
school
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.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 in primary
school
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 are suitable for learning. A primary
school
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 plays a role
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children
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 to use more physical skills, and separate from their families to another society called
school
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.
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, the European compulsory curriculum is the model of many schools around the world that set a program for younger
children
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 to start intensive education in primary schools including secondary
language
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for leading
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 pupils to higher performance.
Thus
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, the primary
school
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 period is the proper age for studying a non-native
language
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. In conclusion, starting to study a
second
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language
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 in primary or secondary
school
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 not a significant difference, but frequency and accuracy are the main keys to making efficient use.

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Task Response
The essay covers the topic adequately by discussing both views. It would benefit from a more detailed explanation of each view.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure, making it difficult to follow the flow of ideas. Improve coherence by organizing the paragraphs more logically.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingualism
  • cognitive development
  • neuroplasticity
  • linguistic acquisition
  • multicultural competence
  • secondary language proficiency
  • core curriculum
  • language immersion
  • academic achievement
  • maturation
  • pedagogy
  • globalization
  • language pedagogy
  • retention rates
  • cultural enrichment
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