describe your leisure time and give your opinion about positive side and negative side to have too much leisure time.

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Recreational time is a necessity especially in
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stiff competition, not only in their workplace but
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in their daily life. The practical way to spend my leisure time
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nature,
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by our actions we are destroying it. On the one hand, the merits of having free time are numerous.
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of the person.
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the immune system and the risk of having
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diabetes
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curbed. Owing
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the possibility of relaxing,from the busy schedule,and doing things that bring enjoyment,
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to a human being.
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stress, is one motive
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nervous breakdown,by escaping a day from the daily routine,
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helps
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psychological problems.
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workers , who are diligent and overworked, have a greater risk of getting
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depression and developing later anxiety.
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, lack of occupation for long period
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causes
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different
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procrastination is activated, due to the fact that the person has to get out of his/her
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comfort
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that people do not find a motive or a goal to fight for,
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even their
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may suffer.
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have
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of feeling utile harms
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long term the person. In conclusion, both have
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and cons, but
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still believe that people should
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willingness
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