Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

It is argued that nowadays it is extremely important to focus on farmlands, housing and industry for humanity by some type of community.
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the contrary way and argue that giving lands
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endangered
animals
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more essential. I totally agree with both sides and give some evidence
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the arguments in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
currently
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humanity has huge demands
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the farmlands or
industrials
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fields
such
as building houses and factories. Because
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growing
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population and developing technologies all around the world, the demand
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them significantly increased.
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up around the world, it means that the request
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accommodations and
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products
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eat
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growth.
On the other hand
, it is really necessary to give
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to the
animals
who are
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danger to disappear.
Firstly
, these species can be very helpful in producing
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types of drugs.
For example
, if a new drug is manufactured, observing the
animals
can tell scientists whether
this
drug is beneficial for its
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or dangerous.
Secondly
, endangered
animals
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helpful in not only checking medicines but producing kind of them. In conclusion, lending lands
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housing and for the increasing
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industrialism or
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type of species which are endangered has some advantages and disadvantages, In my opinion,
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care of endangered
animals
is much better
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offering earth to the new opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food security
  • malnutrition
  • urban development
  • quality of life
  • social stability
  • economic development
  • infrastructure
  • living standards
  • moral responsibility
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem balance
  • environmental degradation
  • climate regulation
  • ecological balance
  • sustainable development
  • compromise
  • natural habitats
  • endangered species
  • medical discoveries
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