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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

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It is argued that nowadays it is extremely important to focus on farmlands, housing and industry for humanity by some type of community.
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, others think
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the contrary way and argue that giving lands
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 endangered
animals
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 more essential. I totally agree with both sides and give some evidence
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 the arguments in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
currently
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humanity has huge demands
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 the farmlands or
industrials
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 fields
such
 as building houses and factories. Because
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growing
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 population and developing technologies all around the world, the demand
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 them significantly increased.
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, if the number of people
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 up around the world, it means that the request
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products
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eat
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growth.
On the other hand
, it is really necessary to give
lands
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 to the
animals
 who are
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 danger to disappear.
Firstly
, these species can be very helpful in producing
variety
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 types of drugs.
For example
, if a new drug is manufactured, observing the
animals
 can tell scientists whether
this
 drug is beneficial for its
costumers
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 or dangerous.
Secondly
, endangered
animals
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helpful in not only checking medicines but producing kind of them. In conclusion, lending lands
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housing and for the increasing
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industrialism or
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 type of species which are endangered has some advantages and disadvantages, In my opinion,
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 care of endangered
animals
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 offering earth to the new opportunities.
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