Some people feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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advertisements are beneficial or not. I believe that they make our life easier. On the one hand, the merits of being informed about a
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are crucial.
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advertising
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advertising
,which is the
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sole
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firms communicate directly with
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clients,
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numerous people.since,there are
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ranging
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from editors to office cleaners,the unemployment rate is curbed.
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would not have been bought.owing to the information that the customer obtains with the aid of
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material, helps him/her to get the right decision
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regarding
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the purchase which will be made.
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iPhone
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annually
lauches
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launches
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model.
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with adverts should not be
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.
firstly
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an item due to
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exorbitant price,
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frustration and
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depression
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depression
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humans.
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necessary
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nevertheless
people buy them, in order to get self
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satisfaction
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,a gadget
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of people, due to its mode of helping housekeepers in getting a receipt. To recapitulate,
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advertising
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monetary problems and unsatisfaction,
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still believe that it
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with it a lot of advantages which
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to make your life easier in terms of choices
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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