Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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an argument between the administrators of countries and individuals about
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the vitality
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of economic plans.
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, based on some
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opinion
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, alternative issues must be valued
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the same level as
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both views and their rational consequences, including my idea, will be mentioned. On the one hand,
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developments and
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life are the results of paying attention to
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items.
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, if the primers invest in
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of
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the
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society will become much
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.
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, people are able to use electronic and upgraded facilities in order to do daily activities simply.
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, the more a country is economically balanced , the more people feel safe and secure. To give an illustration, if parents who are responsible for their youngsters feel certain financially, they would raise
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generation in a healthy and good
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atmosphere.
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, according to some people's opinion, which I strongly agree with, education and culture are
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remarkable factors.
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, the cultural events must take place till
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the country
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about
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the history and backgrounds . Take historical ceremonies
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, the young ones
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methods need to be much more valued. Simply put, the awareness of the
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generation depends on
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the quality
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of learning systems. So, investing in building particular schools and
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experts for teaching have to stand
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the top of
the states plans
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. To conclude, in upgraded nations, the individuals and authorities have
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point of
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about what is the most vital factor to be developed. It is my firm conviction that cultural and historical matters are fundamental issues exactly like financial resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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