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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we are care about them .Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #gifts #friends #show #care #affection
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 belief that gifting is a ritual of showing love and care while
other
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others
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 feel there are much
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better ways to express one's dedication. Material and emotions are two currencies used by people to display
affections
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affection
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. I personally believe that physical presents are not
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 form of care but
a
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 announcement of
ones
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 social status and should be avoided as a form of conveying a message.
Firstly
, many people have no time to
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socialise
socilaise
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socialise
 with friends and family, to fill the gap in
communications
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 they try to bridge it with expensive gifts.
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 a toddler who has no meaning for toys etc seeks
physical
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 presence of his or her guardians as that space can not be replaced by goods. People need to understand that
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life's
life
lifes
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 simple pleasures are way beyond money or products, rather
warmly
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 companionship.
Secondly
,
gifting
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the gifting
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 tradition puts
a
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pressure on both
the
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parties, as one has the obligation to return
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a gift
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gift
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gifts
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 which should match the value of
product
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the product
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 that was gifted and should be likeable.
This
 brings toxicity in the relations where they are measured by the economic values,
furthermore
bring
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 disappointment in the
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close-knit
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close knit
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 family.
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 tradition of gifting on birthdays
have
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 made kids
demanding
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 and expect expensive items without considering
of
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if
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 the parents can afford that product. In conclusion, rather than buying expensive presents one should buy
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experiences
expiriences
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experiences
 like holiday trips and spend more time with near and dear
once
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ones
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. I still remember my mother took me
to
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 vacation every year and those are the best memories I
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cherish
cherrish
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cherish
 to date.
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