Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that supports universal education. To what extent do you agree .

It is undeniable that many
parents
at present have many options in terms of
schools
to choose for their children
such
as public
schools
, private
schools
and international
schools
, resulting in some
parents
thinking
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that if they send their kids to private or international
schools
, they will not pay educational
taxes
for the
state
governments. From my point of view, I disagree with
this
statement for many reasons which will be outlined in the detail in the following paragraph. It is true to say that some families who send their children to private
schools
may agree with that movement because they claim that they dramatically pay the
money
for term fees of their children, and why do they pay
taxes
to
support
education for public
schools
.
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Furthermore
, they think that they are buying school supplies and other materials for their kids by themself without supporting the
state
union
in their country.
For example
,
parents
are spending the majority
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money
on school uniforms, books, pens and other resources with their own income.
However
, others, including me, disagree with
this
statement because educational
taxes
not only
support
public
schools
but
also
support
private
schools
as well, while it may be a little, compared with government-financed
schools
.
For instance
, students in Thailand in private
schools
can be supported by
state
grants in ways of supporting academic subjects.
Additionally
, the
state
union
will help school owners to reduce a business tax and a land tax,
as a result
, students will not pay
money
for their tuition fees too much. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with that viewpoint because paying
taxes
can help the
state
union
improve the educational systems in the ways of others
,
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like they can create the public building for learning to younger people ,and they can make some activities to
support
the cognitive skills of young persons when they have enough
money
.
Therefore
, it is recommended that many
parents
should pay
taxes
to encourage their
state
union
to develop the educational systems because it will be beneficial for their kids.
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