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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
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In modern times
people
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 love to take risks so that they can become more
skillful
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 in Professional
life
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. There are some benefits and drawbacks to taking risks in Personal and Professional
life
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. From my perspective, there are more advantages than drawbacks as I will outline below. Generally speaking, there is a number of advantage to taking risks in
life
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.
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risk
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 brings a lot of
opportunity
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life
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,
it
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 helps to upgrade their skill.
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, there is a chance after taking
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risk
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the risk
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to
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fall down but it helps to
learning
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 something new and it makes them more Perfect in future. For
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instance
intance
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, if anyone takes
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risk
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a risk
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 in his Professional
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then
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he
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fail
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achieve
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, it's not hurt his personal
life
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. Despite these benefits, there are
also
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 various disadvantages to taking
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a risk
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 in
life
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. Perhaps the main cons of
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 it can
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 darkness
in
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People
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life's
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. A person who
have
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the
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responsibility in
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 office, if
he
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takes a
discission
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by
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 his own and
then
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 he failed to conquer it, all of his
employ
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 will suffer. Some
people
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 want to start their own
business
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 and left their job to start
his
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 business.
Although
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 it is good to take
this
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 kind of
risk
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but
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his family and friends would be suffered if he fails. To sum up, nowadays
people
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 have
tendency
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 to
taking
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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 in their personal and Professional
life
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. In my view, the advantage of taking
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risk
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 outweigh the disadvantage.
People
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 should take
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the risk
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risk
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risks
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 so that they could be more successful and improve the
economy
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the economy
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 of their country.
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