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Television has two roles: to inform and to entertain people. Explain which of these roles you see as more important. To what extent do you think that TV today performs each of these roles in an effective way? Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

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In terms of the role of
television
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 in every household, I definitely believe it is much more important to inform than to entertain
people
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.
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,
information
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 can help us make better life decisions ;
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, society should follow national regulations.
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, due to the development of technology,
people
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 have been less using
television
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 to get messages or amusement through
television
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 nowadays.
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 of all, for making our every life decision, the more knowledge, the better, ranging from education arrangement, and job opportunities, to consumption options, to name but a few. But for knowing more options,
people
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 would have blindly followed neighbours' choices. Due to the inventions of mobile phones, we can now access
information
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 and learn new things everywhere. The other,
television
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 broadcasting is an effective way for governments to announce new policies.
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,
people
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 can know instant news in their countries and be informed about what regulations they should follow to avoid committing a crime.
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, rather than
television
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 can passively learn
information
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 from local news authorities or companies, everyone can upload their content on the internet through platforms, like Youtube or Apple podcasts, and share their knowledge and ideas. On top of that, we can now listen to music, watch live sports games or live streaming movies through our computers and mobile phones anytime and no matter where we are. In
this
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 condition, we can have much more
information
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 to learn from all over the world, leading to fewer
people
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 watching
television
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. In conclusion, media technologies -
television
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, mobile phones, and computers - help us can know how many options we have when we are making decisions.
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 to say, making different decisions make us become unique individuals, and able to live in the ways that are most suitable to us.
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