Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Music
diminishes the difference between people
by
its universal power. Change preposition
through
This
power creates a common language
among people
and evaporates the differantion
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differential
diffraction
of
generations. In my opinion, Change preposition
between
Music
's identity allows us to enjoy our society and Correct your spelling
culture
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. Correct your spelling
culture
This
essay will explore Music
's power to bring people
together and provide examples.
If someone goes to
abroad, they need to learn Remove the preposition
apply
local
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the local
language
to communicate, although
music
doesn't require Add an article
the music
this
necessity. Music
has a universal language
created by rhytms
and tunes. Even if, someone doesn't know the song's Correct your spelling
rhythms
language
; they can still accompany to
the song by keeping up with Change preposition
apply
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rhythm
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rhythm
For instance
, everyone knows Beethoven's senfonies
all around the world and creates a universal experience which destroys the barriers between countries and societies.
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sinfonias
An another
point is that Remove the article
Another
Music
doesn't get old. Cultural cults defeat age
diversity between generations. By and large, the Beatles is known by every age
groups
. Fix the agreement mistake
group
For example
, a boy can accompany his grandparents because of having some music
taste. Another example is that traditions contain Replace the word
musical
music
, which allows people
to enjoy together whatever their age
is. In
Christmas, Change preposition
At
people
comes
together in churches to sing carols at every Change the verb form
come
age
. This
activity leads to transition
of Correct article usage
the transition
music
through centuries.
In conclusion, Music
has the benefit of bringing people
together rather than Correct your spelling
anything else
anythingelse
. We should protect Correct your spelling
anything else
this
unique benefit without hesitation. By doing that we might create a unified universal culture, which will allow us to live in peace in every country in the world. We must continue to enjoy with
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apply
music
all together
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altogether
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
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- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite