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food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizer and better machinery.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

#food #fertilizer #machinery
It is true that
people
 are able to access affordable
food
 thanks to the
development
 of agriculture and machinery. From my point of view,
this
 has its benefits and drawbacks. My essay will shed light on
this
 issue and give my opinion. On the one hand, there are many benefits of
food
 prices since the improvement of horticulture.
Firstly
, providing enough
food
 to a whole society can lead to a decline in the number of
people
 who live in poverty life. Since
people
 are able to buy
food
, they will not bear the brunt of the cost of living, which results in the living standard will be ameliorated.
Secondly
, when
people
 can solve the shortage of
food
, they can spend money on developing other fields
such
 as
technology
 and health care. If
people
 can save the budget from cultivation due to the
development
 of machines, they are able to maximize using money.
For example
, as soon as the community can focus on developing health care, they will foster the pace of
development
 of it, leading to a longer life for all residents.
On the other hand
, the drawbacks of significant improvement in
technology
 in agriculture should not be overlooked. Many high-tech machines are unaffordable to low-income
countries
.
This
 can prevent these
countries
 to access modern
technology
 and thereby, the number of impoverished
people
 remains unchanged.
Furthermore
, the imbalance of
development
 of agriculture among
countries
 can lead to a big gap between rich and poor
countries
.
As a result
,
people
 in poor
countries
 fail to make ends meet. In conclusion, despite the
development
 of
technology
 in horticulture,
people
 seem unable to take advantage of it.
Accordingly
, governments should create a policy that provides the fairly right to
people
 to access across the globe.
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