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The pie charts shows the spending habits of people in the UK in 1971 and 2001. Summarize the information by slelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts shows the spending habits of people in the UK in 1971 and 2001. Summarize the information by slelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 how much members of Britain spent on different items in the United Kingdom in the year 1972 and 2001.
Overall
, in 1917,
British
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the British
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 spent much on
food
while
 in 2001, they used much on Cars. The highest expenditure in 1971 in the United Kingdom was on
food
 with 44%
although
in
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 2001,
Fourty
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Forty
 three
percent
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per cent
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 expense was on Cars
hence
 being the only
the only
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apply
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two items that
was
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were
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 highly used. It is
also
 observed that
food
 expenses in 1971
was
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were
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 two times higher than for
the
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apply
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Cars.
However
, in 2001 the British members spent three times more than what is utilized on
food
 ( 43%, 14%) respectively. Petrol usage was 10% in the year 1971 which dropped by 2% in 2001 and Furniture expenditures stepped to 8% in 2001 from 9% in 1971. The United Kingdom used to spend seven
percent
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per cent
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 on restaurants in 1971, but later in 2001 it gradually increased
doubled
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and doubled
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 well as the expense of books declined steadily from 6% in 1971 to only 1% in the year 2001.
Finally
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 the expenditure on Computers rose dramatically from just 2% to 12% in 2001.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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