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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
people
 have faced many dilemmas around the world.
One
 of the dilemmas is whether living in
cities
 or rural
areas
 is better to live. There are several differences between living in
city
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the city
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 and a rural area. Economical opportunities and living more healthier life are the obvious distinctions. Living in a
city
 offers citizens the to earn more money than in rural
areas
 because the important number of companies, fabrics and employment chance is higher in urban
areas
 than in rural
areas
.
Thus
, over the past ten years,
people
 preferred to move
in
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 big
cities
 because they could not earn enough money to survive and wanted to make more money which they had done before.
Therefore
, some
people
 think that
cities
 are the best places to live compared to the countryside.
On the other hand
, when
people
 started to live in the
city
, the level of stress is increasing willingly or unwillingly.
Thus
,
this
 situation leads to some health problems.
In addition
,according to a great
of
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many health reports,
people
 who are living in rural
areas
 are having fewer heart and respiratory issues than others. So, as
cities
 make citizens less healthy, they tend to live in
countryside
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.What's more, air pollution is
one
 of the vital problems in
cities
.
For example
,
people
 who live in China's big
cities
,
they
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have to put masks
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one
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 their
face
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 because of the pollution.
Hence
,
one
 doesn't prefer
in
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rural
areas
 In conclusion, when living in a
city
 compare with living in a rural area, there are various not only advantages but
also
 disadvantages. Economical possibilities and living more healthier life are the two of them.
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