More and more fathers are taking a break from their careers, so that they can stay home and take care of their children while their wives work. This is better for the family than having both paretns work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, the lifestyle of most

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the

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families has been changing significantly. One of the decisions a family has to make is

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to choose to babysit their

children

. It is argued that

fathers

should take some break from their careers to stay at home and bring up their

children

as it is better for the family. I personally am against the trend that

fathers

take some breaks and take care of their kids. In my opinion,

this

approach contradicts several traditional and financial matters in the family.

First

of all,

fathers

taking a break from their work means the family’s finance is going to be really tight. In most cases, the salary for men is always marginally higher, compared to women. To clarify, if the father stops going to work and earning money, the family’s income becomes lower and that does no good to the family.

Moreover

, the chance for

further

promotion in jobs for men is slightly higher than for women, which helps the family’s long-term financial stability. In my opinion,

fathers

staying at home looking after their

children

and doing household chores, while mothers work for money just does not match up with a traditional image of family. Ever since the beginning of history, the husbands went outside and provide for the needs of the family, while wives took care of the other things in the house. So it is not only an unnatural way of having a family but,

also

such

a lifestyle can be challenging for the males.

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, they often have a hard time getting used to staying at home and spending all day with only their

children

. It just is not the nature of

fathers

. All in all, it

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not only cause money-related hard times for families that

fathers

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it is not a suitable way to live for husbands.

Although

it may have some possible advantages, still families should consider other methods to care for their

children

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

341 words

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