Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a significant number of companies prevent consulting
tobacco
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in working place .
In
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particular
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,particular

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as it is forbidden to smoke in public places according to some
nations
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nation's
nations'

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authority
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authorities

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. I vehemently agree with banning smoking at all because it causes fatal effects not only on human
beings
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beings'
being's

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lives but
also
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on the surrounding.In
this
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essay, I describe my point of view and draw a rational conclusion at the end. On the one hand,without hesitation ,
tobacco
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is a defeatist mentality that users
ought
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toought

The modal verb ought seems to be missing its required partner to. Consider adding the word to.

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give up.
This
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is due to the fact that drinking is injurious
for
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to

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everyone's mental
wellbeing
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well-being

The word wellbeing doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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, not just smokers' bodies.
For instance
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, if a non-smoker sits
next
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to a
tobacco
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consumer's
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consumer

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, they will unintentionally breathe in the hazardous compounds that cigarettes release. According to recent research that former smokers who lie down across from
tobacco
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products may establish the same dangerous illnesses as smokers,
such
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as asthma, high blood pressure,
lung
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and lung

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diseases.
On the other hand
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,
as
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apply

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nations with strict laws on communal cigarette burning have clean air.
As a result
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, the
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ecosystem
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ecosystem

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eco system
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is indeed very clean, which means that the living organisms produce adequate ventilation, which makes it possible for these nations to grow enough food
that is
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highly nutritious.
For instance
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, recent studies
shown
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have shown
showed

The past participle verb shown has been used without an auxiliary verb. Consider adding one or using the past simple instead.

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that carbon emissions
has
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have

The singular verb has does not appear to agree with the plural subject carbon emissions. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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an influence on
human
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the human

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health of
the
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apply

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animals and
the
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apply

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plants. And
thus
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, how well-off the country is. In conclusion, I
conced
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concede
concur
conceded

If you don’t want conced to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

that, in
a
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apply

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several
nation
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nations

The singular countable noun nation follows the quantifier several, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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this
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have
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has

The verb have does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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already
prevent
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prevented

It appears that the verb prevent should be in the past participle form. Consider changing it.

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it for a few humanity it greatly
influence
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influences

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for
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apply

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everybody that every political establishment
ought
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toought

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take steps to avoid the inhaling of harmful substances in industries and other common spaces in order to safeguard the wellbeing of its citizens and reduce the contamination of the environment.

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