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With the rise of E-book comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward, while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In recent years, the development in technology has made things easier,
many
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companies
campanies
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companies
,industries and hospitals are diverting from paper to paperless
way
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ways
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 of storing
informations
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information
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. Some people see
this
 as the better way while others are of diverse
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opinions
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.
This
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E-book
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 to paper.
Firstly
,
informations
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information
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 are easily saved and retrieved,
this
 is because the computer stores all the
informations
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 with names, numbers,alphabets or phrases for easy retrieval.
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, in a modern hospital, most
patients
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 data are stored in their computers, so if the patient
revisit
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, the stored data will be accessed for continuity of care.
Secondly
, it saves cost because the money spent on getting materials
such
 as papers,pens etc that are used in documentation can
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 into other resources.
Thirdly
, it
make
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 work easier and faster, one can easily type
informations
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 and transfer
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next
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 person for approval.
For instance
, in a bank setting, a cashier will collect money from a customer, confirm the amount and
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 it and
then
 send the details to a higher sector to
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 and credit the customer. There are
also
 some cons
in
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 Paperless organization and one of the biggest
problem
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 is
electricity
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outage
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. In some developing countries,
this
 has
a serious effects
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 like delaying work, causing traffic among customers, unsatisfied customers, frustration etc. thereby, affecting the
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 of the company.
In addition
, it can be hacked,
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 and information stored can be
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loss
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, if not properly
handle
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 by the information technology personnel in the industry.  In summary, E-book technology is the best way of providing good services than the use of
paper
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book
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books
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • portability
  • tactile experience
  • aesthetic pleasure
  • adjustable font sizes
  • built-in dictionaries
  • note-taking
  • accessibility
  • visual impairments
  • text-to-speech
  • customizable
  • wear and tear
  • technical failures
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