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- Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. - Why is this? - What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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After discovering the limits of fossil energies, the world now is orienting
on
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 renewable ones
such
 as wind, water and solar which became a must in every house due to their important role. and
this
 essay I will discuss the main reasons for using solar
energy
 specifically, plus its benefits and
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inconvenience
inconveniences
inconvenients
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inconveniences
.
First
 of all, after the significant increase in air pollution which is caused essentially by burning fuel to produce
energy
, it was time to search for an alternative the quickest possible,
that is
 how solar
energy
 get its place in our life
,
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 and became more and more popular on every sector. ,
moreover
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this
 type of
power
 is illimited contrary to the fuel
power
, the thing that coming to its end according to the latest statistics.
Second
 of all, renewable energies are the most "nature's friend" by producing 0 per cent of gazes,
in other
words
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this
 will reduce air pollution and close ozone whole one of the biggest problems
on
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 our environment. another point, economically talking, using renewable
power
 limit the cost of your bills and could guarantee plus than 50 per cent reduction in your monthly consumption of electricity.
Finally
, if we want to talk about the disadvantages of solar
energy
 which are few, we need to mention at
the
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first
 degree the high cost of installation, even if it is a
long term
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 investment but it needs an important amount to be properly working.
in addition
, at the present
time
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 its productivity is still limited compared to
the
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fossil
energy
,
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 because it depends only on the sun which is not available every day and everywhere. To sum up, despite some challenges, solar
energy
 present
a
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hope for saving our planet,
that
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 is why it must be one of the main sources of
power
 in every house.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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