Some people believe that by killing someone society is also making a crime, so, that why death penalty should be forbidden. Life in prison would be a better punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

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crime rate has a detrimental effect on
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society. Some suggest that
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penalty is the best solution for
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criminals
while others believe that putting them
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is a better option.
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with the statement.
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, taking the
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of a person, even if they commit serious crimes,
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is a fatal mistake;
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should be excluded as an alternative.
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approach may deter offenders to break the law,which might think twice before tending to step the green light, as a consequence, being afraid of
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cruel punishment.
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, it may cause
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society, since it
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hater
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among the citizens.
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, as a
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method, people choose the kill the violator
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and the proportion of crimes
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still very high.
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,it breaks
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human right. We should all have
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a lot of
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release changed their
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completely.
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, there are countries that during the sentence, offer
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of
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. In conclusion,
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a way of posing a threat
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innocent people,
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still believe that it is invaluable to respect
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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