Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.

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the
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that they take to do the
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in the past. There are only a few
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who give their resting
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that they like.
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why
hobby
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popular as same as in the previous.
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the reason that can represent why there is only
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people
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devote
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to
hobbies
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, there are a
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of
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believe
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that they need to spend a
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of money for doing a
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alternative
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for workers'
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hobby
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, the cost
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each
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becomes more and more expensive.
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doing ice skating and playing some
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, you will be responsible to spend a
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of money on entrance
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and shoe
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then
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your
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collective income that you prepare for
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people
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who devote
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hobbies
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their
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to become
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balance
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.
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some
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to
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individual
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people
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which are
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stress. When
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grow up, they will face
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various
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depression
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that
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and affect
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their mental health.
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the office, there
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a
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of risk
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that
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increasingly their stress
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as workload and toxic
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, they are suggested to find
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time
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to remove
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problems by doing some
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that
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are enjoyable on the weekend. In conclusion,
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hobby
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a hobby
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is
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necessary thing that every
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must have because it
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many
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to their life, while there are only
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a few
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people
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who
interested
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to spend their resting
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for
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doing their
hobbies
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.
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the
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time
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management can cause
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do
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not
have
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hobbies
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time
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in their life and introduced
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mental health problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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